A new original song from Songwritings, complete with reworked 1927 video
Love this!
This is beautiful ❤️
Super enjoyable. Glad you are in my inbox.
Starting the song with the chorus is awesome and a great hook but the verses story does not match the chorus story.
My suggestion would be to keep the chorus but rewrite the verses and describe why "I delight in you" and not talk about yourself.
The melody verses seems to be awkward transistor, it needs to flow better. Changing up the verses can fix that.
For example:
Verse 1: you walk among the stars
Im captured by your charm,
I never knew i, could be so much in love
You will need a bridge
Just my humble opinion
Lovely
Hi Nick, Kate
Really enjoyed the song...
Look forward to more.
Thanks
Nandita
Transition
Love this!
This is beautiful ❤️
Super enjoyable. Glad you are in my inbox.
Starting the song with the chorus is awesome and a great hook but the verses story does not match the chorus story.
My suggestion would be to keep the chorus but rewrite the verses and describe why "I delight in you" and not talk about yourself.
The melody verses seems to be awkward transistor, it needs to flow better. Changing up the verses can fix that.
For example:
Verse 1: you walk among the stars
Im captured by your charm,
I never knew i, could be so much in love
You will need a bridge
Just my humble opinion
Lovely
Hi Nick, Kate
Really enjoyed the song...
Look forward to more.
Thanks
Nandita
Transition