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Love this!

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So do I :)

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This is beautiful ❤️

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Thank you Sarah! 🙏

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Super enjoyable. Glad you are in my inbox.

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Thanks Ted, really appreciate this

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Starting the song with the chorus is awesome and a great hook but the verses story does not match the chorus story.

My suggestion would be to keep the chorus but rewrite the verses and describe why "I delight in you" and not talk about yourself.

The melody verses seems to be awkward transistor, it needs to flow better. Changing up the verses can fix that.

For example:

Verse 1: you walk among the stars

Im captured by your charm,

I never knew i, could be so much in love

You will need a bridge

Just my humble opinion

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Thanks for listening and taking the time to comment William, all feedback appreciated!

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Lovely

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Bless you

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Hi Nick, Kate

Really enjoyed the song...

Look forward to more.

Thanks

Nandita

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Thanks Nandita, really good to hear 🙏

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Transition

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